The story is nice. Congratulations to you. It's a nice feeling when your efforts are recognised in the first attempt itself. Keep it up and start writing more stories.
hai jayasankar, it was hillarious...i came to trace some resemblence of mi kishan style of narrating .funny...yes it was a good attempt..hope you will continue..was it SWARGAMLO SAAYANTHRAM...or ..i felt it was.....MONATONY..LO...MOKSHAM.. sorry just kidding....plz do come out with more stuff in future...fantastic...keep it up